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Concerning Kingdoms (image source from Wikipedia)
Jusa, Cayden, and Roma ended up to enjoy traveling since Jusa got exiled. They were the type to meet new villagers and stay they for a few days before they continued on their journey. Roma is Jusa's wife and she recently got abducted by a beast name Grudle, which Jusa and Cayden killed. They continue on their traveling journey to explore what the world has to offer.
During their journey, they came across a rare kingdom named Truth at the top of the mountain. It had an extremely beautiful view with flowers blooming, a stream flowing down the hill, animals prancing around like they seem to be in love with their home. Jusa, Cayden and Roma made their home at Truth for a while but it was too good for it to be relaxing. They still had a enemy out there to kill them and his name was Vasop. He was known to be the Lord of Britania, the most ruthless killing leader out there.
Vasop is known to be the strongest warrior in his kingdom. He became very powerful because he's been practicing years of killing. His intentions were to kill anyone who was against him or who tried to overthrow him. He wanted his kingdom to be the most dominant, powerful land out there. His goal was to takeover other land and have his kingdom expand out. The only advantage he had was his strept demons as his fearless warriors, that were immortal. These warriors looked like dead humans that got revived by the devil to live forever. They had no emotions or care for anything, and their only goal was to kill.
Vasop sent out his strept demons out to overthrow other kingdoms and kill the villagers to steal their land. And that kingdom was Truth. Stept demons came upon Jusa, Cayden, and Roma and tried to kill them. Jusa took out his sacred weapon, the sphere, to fight these demons and they were getting beat. No one could beast Jusa, so they retreated back to their Lord Vasop to inform him. He sent out his sister Hara, to find these villagers and kill them.
Hara reaches to kingdom of Truth and tries to kill them but Cayden ends up slicing her arm off. For the first time, she was getting beaten. She fled off to find Vasop and tell him what happened. And he wanted vengeance.
Author notes: This story is from The Forest Life when Rama, Sita and Lakshmana were wandering in the forrest. Sita got abducted by a beast Viradha and got killed. They eventually visit a place called Panchavati where rivers flow, deers wander, and it was breathtaking. This place just seemed peaceful and filled with love in the nature, but it was too good to be true. A rakshasas passed by and tried to kill Sita, but Lakshmana cut off her ears and nose so she fled off. This rakshasas is known to be Ravana's younger sister named Surpanakha. Ravana despises Rama and Lakshamana and would do anything to kill them.
Sister Nivedita, The Forest Life, Link
Hi Tracy! I enjoyed your story, as I progressed through the story I began realizing familiar elements from the Ramayana. I also enjoyed how you ended this story. It makes me wonder if next story you are going to continue the vengeance that Vasop has towards the three travelers or if we, the reader, are to create our own ending. Good job!
ReplyDeleteHi Tracy, good story. I liked how you rebranded the characters and setting to something that to me seems totally original. I think you took the story in a good direction, and I hope that you had fun writing the story. You did a great job turning the story into your own work. Keep enjoying the class, and good job.
ReplyDeleteI think it is really cool that you continued you last story using the same three characters. It is like you are writing a mini book. I really like how you made the Ramayana your own yet still honored the original. Adding some dialogue might be one thing you would want to consider if you continue writing about these characters.
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ReplyDeleteI remember reading your first story about Jusa, Cayden, and Grudle before and thought it was so good! I thought it was so cool that you connected this story to your first in the way that you did. The amount of detail that you put into your stories is really awesome, and the ending left me wondering if the story was going to continue!
Hi Tracy! I like how you continued to use the same characters from the last story. I also like how you left the story on a cliffhanger. I want to know what you would want to write the rest of the story. I think you should continue writing some stories about Jusa and Cayden!
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